Edit+this+poem!

Edit a poem!

 * OVERVIEW:** This poor poet didn't know any of our class lessons! Help her edit ONE stanza of her poem.

Lessons to apply:
 * Power of I: Put the "I" up higher
 * Use a thesaurus; find stronger verbs for weak verbs
 * Break a line BEFORE the end of a sentence; however, be sure to maintain correct punctuation
 * Cut out or edit unnecessary words, including –ing words
 * Showing, rather than telling

**Step by step directions**
1. Cut and paste ONE of the stanzas below into a word document 2. Edit the stanza, applying the above lessons; ok to add a line or words if needed 3. Copy and paste the edited version into a shared Google document. Paste YOUR edited stanza into the cell that has your laptop number. Get to the document by clicking on this link: **http://tinyurl.com/y8zr6yj**

__EDIT STANZA 1__ There was an envelope in the mailbox. We were hoping for a fat envelope. The sound of my brother’s voice, answering the phone, came to my ears. “Is it fat?” I asked He said, “Yes.” I was happy.

OR

__EDIT STANZA 2__ The sign was handmade. Its colors filling our eyes. My family had never, ever done this before. My mom gave me my Wesleyan sweatshirt. I put it on. "Smile," she said, while taking my picture. I was happy.